On Raapa te 13o Mahuru we zoomed as fast like we were a rocket to the hall to get ready we had to go around the back cause they were do gymnastics and we got our shirts we had to wait for Taine cause he had to take his necklace off then we started walking we got to marian we were all looking for steven were is he brrrr!!! Tu turu whakamoa kia teina Teina lets go marian said the crowd our kick off we score shot Taine I kick the ball on they knock it on marian won 6 1 we shook hands good game good game good game.We do our haka they do their haka we won the haka.Finally we see steaven we get a photo with him.
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ReplyDeleteGreat post Kredenz, I like how you put your story in place, step by step. Next time you should maybe make the letters smaller and put some full stops in your story so we can take a breath. Reydon, Room 11, Tui Hub.
ReplyDeleteI really like that you used te reo in you story and that you also used adjective's like "we zoomed as fast like we were a rocket". Next time you should probably use more punctuation and use spaces after a full stop. Did you get a try?
ReplyDeleteDaesharn rm11